October 8, 2020
By ZekeÂ
Stalking Stoutly. Running Swiftly. Tearing flesh. Bears are large carnivores Mammals with shaggy hair, long snouts, and stubby tails. The Largest Bear (not counting the Polar Bear), is The Kodiak Bear. This Alaskian giant is only found on Kodiak Island, Alaska. Like the swarthy sky on a stormy night, Black Bears are darker than brown bears and are less aggressive, sometimes even being scared of humans. They live in most of North America, and there are lots of different types of these dark creatures. Brown Bears live in Russia, Europe, Central Asia, and Canada. They are the most common type of bear in the world. Grizzly Bears are a type of Brown Bear that dwell in the Western United States and Canada. They are one the most aggressive Bears. Hugh Glass, a Frontiersmen, was left for dead by his companies in the Wyoming Wilderness and grusemously mauled by a Grizzly Bear, but he miraculously survived, killing the Bear. These Blood-thirsty Bears are better to be left alone.
Zeke, Wow, poor Hugh Glass. Bet he didn’t look too pretty after that mauling!
I didn’t know the grizzly bear is the world’s most aggressive 🻠bear.
Thank you for this great information.
Love â¤ï¸ you, Gramsey
This is a really fascinating paragraph!
Couple of things: You have capitalized some words that don’t require it, such as “stoutly … swiftly … and the” Kodiak Bear.
Other than your 3SSS, all your sentences are subject/verb, and three in a row start with “They.” Can you mix that up a little bit? For example, instead of “They are the most common type of bear in the world. Grizzly Bears are a type of Brown Bear that dwell in the Western United States and Canada,” you could say, “The most common type of the bear in the world, Grizzly bears …”
And if you can use a synonym for “dark” and “aggressive,” that would be great. You really don’t want to repeat an adjective in this short of an essay.
But overall, awesome job!